Teacher Rough Cut Feedback

I think the band performance is the strongest footage you have, along with the walking shots, i think you should introduce them earlier on. Have you been following your storyboard? Currently your video feels a little disjointed, and there are some continuity issues, such as your performer washing his face, then being in the bath, then being in the mirror and then back in the bath again..?
I would also advise you to have more close-ups. Remember that the point of a music video is to sell the artist as well as the song and you can't do that if you can't see your artist clearly.
I really like the close-ups of the instruments too.
The selection of mise-en-scene could be stronger, what makes your video look less like a group of students messing around and more like a professional music video?
Look at this video as a strong example of how to make a video that doesn't look like student's dancing around but looks, 90% of the time, like a professional artist starring in their music video

I realise that the above video is a different genre to yours but the things that make it good could equally be applied to your song. Use it as a basis to discuss what is needed to make your video better.
You have worked well so far - keep going.